Descriptive writing

Yesterday we were learning how to write descriptive sentences by following a specific formula.

It went like this:  2 adjectives (describing words), then a noun followed by a verb (action word).  

We were looking at a photo of The Madhatter

What do you think of our first attempts?

Red, matted hair sticking out grabbing the trees.
Islah

Orange, glowing eyes staring at you.
Bridget

Red lips blowing to the trees.
Becky

Orange, fuzzy hair puffing out like spaghetti.
Lucian

Pink, glossy lips reaching for a kiss.
Niamh